Snow Can Wait # 6 | Walter Ruhlmann
I counted the tears of a thousand men
and clasped in my arms
they almost suffocated.
My god I feel dizzy
and the ground is giving way
under the weight of the nights
spent with them
I felt weak
today when I think of it
I was rather brave
to have dared to spend
so many nights in the caves full
of violence and absence,
of bodies going into trance.
Troubling but in a good way.
Posted by: Jennifer | April 22, 2008 at 05:36 PM
Mysterious nights and hidden caves: a very intriguing poem, Walter.
Posted by: aurora | April 23, 2008 at 05:04 PM
Enjoyed.
Posted by: Robert | April 23, 2008 at 06:32 PM
The last line is especially powerful.
Posted by: Felicia | April 28, 2008 at 12:35 AM
This is strong writing, eerily invocative and lush, despite its sparse simplicity.
Love this opening:
"I counted the tears of a thousand men
and clasped in my arms
they almost suffocated."
Excellent work, Walter!
Posted by: Joseph Armstead | May 02, 2008 at 11:46 AM