all summer,
rain rain rain. . .
and even in the sun
the quiet breeze
spits at me
janet lynn davis
07-07
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just a quick one to release some angst about this summer - extremely soggy here, but at least the temps are being kept down a little.
Posted by: janet lynn davis | July 31, 2007 at 09:27 AM
Awww, I felt that way yesterday, too!
This really works.
Posted by: Aurora | July 31, 2007 at 11:10 AM
amazing, I believe we may have gone for 2 days now without rain. but our ground is still saturated, more than I can ever remember. anyway, thanks for stopping by, aurora.
Posted by: janet lynn davis | August 01, 2007 at 09:24 AM
I like this for expressing the frustrations of what I always imagine as a perfect summer following a long winter, only to rediscover the mosquitoes, rain, heat, etc. And, there's the psychological message ... the sense that something is off for you in more ways than just the rain ... being spat on is quite strong. Maybe I'm reading too much in on that aspect, though.
Ray
Posted by: Ray Rasmussen | August 02, 2007 at 01:51 PM
Thanks v. much, Ray, for the thoughtful comments. You're not necessarily reading too much into this. I wrote this in an impromptu way -- more rain this summer than I can ever remember and, then, when I was taking a brief walk "in the sun" one morning, it literally felt like the breeze was "spitting" on me. Perhaps there is/was a certain level of general angst involved too. Yes, "spit" is strong, but I thought I'd leave it up to readers to read in what they'd prefer to read in.
Posted by: janet lynn davis | August 05, 2007 at 02:10 PM