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Hi Ray,

This is my favourite:

garage cleaning day
a thick layer of dust
on the canning jars

I really like how the prose to this builds, and the various scenes it takes the reader through.

I like the 2nd or 3rd 'ku. This is interesting, Ray.

I agree with Aurora as to what she says and her choice of haiku.

MY difficulty is thinking of these as 'haystacks'. To me they are all versions of hay bales. Hay stacks, as I know them, are piles of hay that get left in the fields for the animals to browse on. They often take on an eaten-out-in-the-middle shape ( for which there is a geometric term that I can't recall just now..helix?) and are seldom, to never, seen any more..save in old photographs and paintings.

But maybe this is just me?

Kirsty

I vote for no.2 as well. Enjoyed.

Thanks all, and Kristy, especially for the thoughts about bales vs stacks. I'll be editing that in the next draft.
Ray

Sorry for the misspelling Kirsty, my fingers move too fast sometimes.
Ray

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